Good morning friends. Let's break it down. By now you're getting a bit of a sense of the characters of Pat and Danya, though they're a bit flat. I'm still pleased with the lighting and especially the point of view in the third panel. The fish in the second panel was one of the only times that I ventured into trying to get a slightly painterly texture going.
What doesn't work? Danya's face in the fourth panel is a complete failure. To be completely honest, I never felt like I got a handle on drawing him. Another problem with this page is the overall wordiness of the word bubbles. Let's talk about bubbles for a minute. As you may have read in my last post, I brought up thumbnails and the importance of spotting the locations for your bubbles early on. Now, when making the graphic novel Chandra, I did this badly. Basically I wrote the script, then converted it to thumbnails with no consideration of where the written dialogue would fit in. A rookie mistake. What happened when it came time to work the bubbles in was that I realized I'd not left enough room when drawing the thing in the first place, consequently I had to edit a lot of the dialogue so that it would fit in the proscribed areas. Now I've learned. Let me make these mistakes so you don't have to.
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